Woah...that snare is really sharp. I like the ominous vibe and the moody vocals. The rap bit was also well-done, yet it was a bit hard to distinguish the lyrics. The bass is really heavy, and personally I wasn't a huge fan of how the bass instrument meshed with the rest of the texture. In fact, I think the texture could use a lot more fill in general - some mid-level pads or riffs would help out a lot. You begin to incorporate some of those elements at 1:40, but I think the verses early on in the piece still sound a tad thin. Still, my favorite element of the piece by far was the vocals. You clearly have a wide variety of vocal talents. Production is solid, too. Sound design was a bit wonky for a hip hop track, but overall the piece came together really well. Keep at it, man. ;)