The tempo automations at the beginning are cool, although the synth there sounds a tad harsh in my headphones. I’m not sure the frantic pace of the synth by :28 lined up well with the more reserved-sounding beat at :29, but I like the riffs there too. The beat is a little dry, and the synths sound a bit square and generic. I’m also not sure the simple drum fill at 1:45 was a super effective transition into the full-textured synth patterns at 1:50. There are also a lot of moments in the piece like 2:22, where you completely switch the palette of foregrounded riffs in the texture without much warning.
I think transitions are something you should really focus on going forward. Investing in some more advanced techniques like filtering and automation would probably help, but cross fading and drum fills can work well in certain contexts. A good rule of thumb is that relatively sudden transitions usually need to share at least one core common element on either side of the change in order to be smooth enough (a common bass riff, pad drone, arpeggiated harmony, etc.).
The other main problem I have with the piece is the lack of variety in the harmonies. You switch up the instrumentation pretty often, but you don’t really introduce any new riffs or variations later in the piece. Try to include a bridge or breakdown in your piece that has a different harmonic framework or chord progression than the rest of the track. In this track, 2:55 was probably a good opportunity for that, but instead of a contrasting melody or mood, the main riff plays there again.
Overall, though, I admire your sense of harmony, rhythm, and atmosphere. The mixing is also pretty clear and well-balanced. Smooth transitions and variety are the main things to add to your toolbox next, but this is a great start. Keep at it, Dysutopia12! :)
Mixing, mastering, and balance
1.75/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
.75/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.5/2
Instrumentation and sound design
.5/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.5/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
1/1
Composite score
7/10