I like the emotional strings at the beginning, but the little bells/mallet instrument sound way too thin and also up out of their range. Part of that might be the way they’re mastered, but I suspect it’s just not a very high-quality sample. Many of the instruments in this piece are a little cheesy and generic, from the bass at :14 to the pads and drum samples at :46, especially the open hat. You clearly have a good sense of rhythm and harmony, and the progression is nice in that it builds up to a pretty intense moment at 1:10. The melodic content here is strong, but some of the melodic instruments can sound a little harsh in the mix, especially the one at 1:10. Speaking of the mix, I think it’s a little too quiet. I’d recommend you look into compression, equalization, and other mixing techniques. That’ll make your piece sound fuller, crisper, and louder in general. There might also be some balance issues in the mix. For example, the lead tends to overwhelm the harmonies at 1:10, while the kick and snare are very loud. Overall, the composition here is pretty solid. My main concerns are with the mixing and sound design. Keep at it, EternityBash! :)
Mixing, mastering, and balance
.75/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
1.25/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
2/2
Instrumentation and sound design
.25/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1.25/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.25/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.25/1
Composite score
6/10