I liked the intro, but I think that the part at :25 got a little muddy. The kick is a little weak. I think you need to equalize out the low frequencies on all of those instruments. Then the kick sound clearer once you have a lot going on. Otherwise, not much to add. I like the instruments, and your compositional skills seem to be pretty good. Long way to go before it's structurally complete, though, but I think it'll be worth your time to finish this. Keep at it, man. ;)