It starts off a little slow...but it's also pretty climactic so I'll let it slide. ;) It's very distorted and creepy, which is a good thing! When that riff came in at :33 I thought it was just kind of wierd, but the "melody" at 1:36 really added a lot to the piece. It got a little repetitive, though. I think you should bring out that back-up melody that starts at about 2:25 more. Sorry to say this, but the ending is weak. It's like the beginning- slow and quite a bit boring, to be honest. Sorry. That bass at 3:53 threw me off a bit- I thought you were going to do something more with the piece, but you didn't. It's still a good quality piece with a lot of potential, but it needs to be more engaging and less repetitive. Hope this helped and keep up the good work! :)