I like the cute synths at the beginning. There’s a lot of reverb in the mix, but it helps fill in the otherwise minimal texture. The strings and bass blend well with the pizzicato-y synths, although I think some of the percussion samples at :38 sounded a bit too in-your-face for the otherwise relaxed mood of the track. The “hey”s at :53 were pretty cheesy, and were also a bit over-saturated in the mix. The piano at 1:05 has way too much reverb, to the extent that it buries the synths below it in the mix. The progression in this piece is pretty slow-paced, and the texture remains relatively thin throughout. You introduce a lot of different instruments and riffs throughout this 9+ minutes, but there’s rarely a strong sense of direction and cohesion among the different sections. Some of the same chord progressions, sure, but I’m not sure that all of the different sections are a part of the same story when they’re joined by sudden transitions like at 2:38. Stop-start transitions are pretty hard to pull off in my experience, and there are a lot of extended pauses in this piece. When there’s repetition involved in the piece (which is more than often enough), it’s not really varied or expanded upon in a meaningful harmonic way so as to further the development of the storyline of the piece. The vocal samples from your friends seemed goofy and out-of-place. The minimal composition and lack of melodic content make it hard to stay engaged, and the drum rolls at 7:21 were quite a bit overdone. Don’t get me wrong, there are some good ideas in here, between the catchy riffs and cute instruments, but the arrangement feels really disjointed, the vocals frankly lack seriousness, and the composition is bland at best. I’m glad you’re having fun with your friends, though. Good luck with your future projects, man.
Mixing, mastering, and balance
.5/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
.25/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
.25/2
Instrumentation and sound design
.25/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
.5/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.25/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
0/1
Composite score
2/10