I like the emotion at the beginning. The intro dragged on for a bit long, but the vocals are hauntingly beautiful as always. The lyrics themselves are also good, but something about their pacing threw me off a bit. The delivery of “my love” at 1:25 and “does she even notice me” both felt a little rushed, especially in the context of the long melisma on “I wonder.” That’s a pretty small detail in context, though. I thought the interlocking vocal lines at 1:39 was a fantastic idea, although admittedly it was a little hard-to-follow without staring at the lyrics on the page. I absolutely love how the lyrics tell a story, while at the same time the structure of the piece seems a bit too meandering. I also thought that your voice sounded a little too breathy at times, like at “you are” (2:30) and “man” (3:23). Still, this content is beautiful and refreshing. You’ve really capitalized on the simplicity here to give the piece a lot of emotional appeal. Keep it up, Jordi! ;)
Mixing, mastering, and balance
2/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
1.75/2
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.75/2
Instrumentation and sound design
.75/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1/1
Originality and uniqueness
1/1
Overall (how do the above elements interact?)
.75/1
Composite score
9/10