TaintedLogic's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[Sky Streaks]

I like the blissful mood at the beginning. The piece is pretty slow to progress. I would recommend varying your dynamics more to create a sense of buildup during the first minute or so. I think you needed a sweep or crash at 1:30 to smooth over that transition. The kick sounds a little indistinct at 2:29. I think you should’ve equalized and compressed it more carefully. You do very little to preempt several of your major transitory moments, such as 2:58 and 3:57. That probably means you need to do more with the phrasing and automations. I think you needed to incorporate some more dynamic contrast in here, too. Overall, this is a pretty underwhelming piece. The only moment when the melody felt as exposed as it should’ve been was 3:57. I think it would help if you went for a more legato style in your melodies that matched the atmospheric nature of this piece. Your piece also lacks an overarching sense of development. Instead, your melodies follow a very formulaic 4-bar dance pattern with little variation in the melodies themselves. I also thought your instruments sounded pretty generic and that you could’ve made the harmonies come through the mix a lot clearer at times (such as the bass at 3:13). I think you could’ve done a lot more to maximize the emotion here in general. I’d say the clarity of the low frequencies, the lack of melodic and dynamic variety, and the instrumentation need work. Otherwise, it has a lot of potential. Keep at it, man. ;)

5.5/10

BeeFef responds:

Well, it disappoints me that I didn't make it into the final round, but I know this can help me for what I can do next time. Thanks for the review and pointing things out! Hopefully I'll do better next year.

[pür]

It’s a catchy piece. You kind of launch right into the action without much of a sense of introduction. Even a sweep or crash at the beginning might’ve helped release some tension and allowed you to draw the most emotion possible out of the ensuing buildup. The buildup itself was really drawn out, and only resolves at around the 1-minute mark, ⅓ of the way through the piece. That said, you don’t really have much strong melodic content in there, even during the “refrain” at 1:00. You essentially just added the 5th into the chord with an instrument I thought sounded a little thin. Then, by around 1:45 the rhythm was a little hard-to-follow and some of the notes became indistinct, which might be because of an excess of reverb. I thought the drums were mastered well throughout the track, although after a while the track gets very repetitive and never really has a second climax. The ending was not very conclusive at all, and in fact I thought the transition at 3:00 was going to lead to another “emotional height.” Having only one peak of energy in your track is a risky move compositionally, and so the drawn-out last minute or so of the piece subsequently failed to keep me engaged. Overall, I think you need more structural variety, including a proper breakdown or bridge section and some more fleshed out melodies later in the piece. The mixing is good, the transitions are solid, and you have a good sense of harmony. Otherwise, you have some work to do on the structural and melodic content. Keep at it, man. ;)

6/10

AwesomeAri responds:

Thanks for the feedback! I wasn't able to finish it :c by the time I knew that time was given until 30th I was already on vacation :c but nvm at least I know what to learn!

[Asau]

I'm not responsible for judging your piece in the competition, but I like this track a lot. The mood is quirky yet blissful. The melodies are so amazingly cathartic. I might've liked the drums to have a bit more presence during the chorus, but that's basically my only mixing complaint. The instrumentation here is nice. I especially like the percussion at around 2 minutes in. This track is really spacey and atmospheric. Sometimes I feel like it changes moods a little too fast, like the relatively sudden infusion of energy at 2:33, but overall it's a really fun piece. I think you could've brought out those awesome descending harmonies at 3:30 more. Overall, this piece is well-structured and smooth-flowing. Excellent use of harmony and texture. The ambiguous ending works well here too. Nice work! ;D

Onefin responds:

Hey, TL! Thanks a million for dropping by! Glad you liked it!

"Quirky" doesn't have the exact connotation I was looking for, but close enough. That was the goal!

I tried to give the drums more presence, but it seems it wasn't enough. :/ Eh, at least it lets the melodies ring through the space.

Aurgentin below me said the bongos at 2:00 are "awkward" XD I guess that really is just a personal pet peeve for him

Let's see, 2:33... oh yes, that part. I tried to do a sort of callback to the beginning to sort of guide the listener as to where the track would go next so that the energy didn't hit so hard, and I also did a slow tempo boost there. Maybe if the tempo ramped back up more quickly, it would have been less sudden. Take notes, me.

Yeah, I do love that melody at 3:30. Bring it out more? I thought that's why I wrote 3:45, but I guess not :/ How could I have done that? Maybe I could have had more layers backing it, but more layers means more mud... hm

Harmony and texture are two things I love and use a lot! :D

Ambiguous ending? Not quite was I was going for, but I guess that's what ambiguous means, right?

One last time, thanks so much for the review! It means a lot coming from a pro like you! I'll be sure to keep these words in mind in the future!

[-Toil-]

This is a very catchy track with a lot of engaging content throughout. I also enjoyed the vocal samples. I think it was very bass-heavy overall, so much so that the more melodic riffs get drowned out at times, like at 2:11. I also think the drums could've been mastered a lot louder. Perhaps the ending could've been more climactic or interesting. It's well-structured and smooth-flowing nevertheless. I like the filtering and distortion at around 4:10 and, despite being a little long, the piece maintains my attention throughout. Keep at it, Waterflame. ;)

Waterflame responds:

Thank you for the constructive feedback and nice words! I kind of wanted to hear something like this. The mix was the one thing that made me a bit skeptic about calling this song done.
And I can hear that you are def. right about that. I could have cut into the bass a bit and made some more room for the drums.
As far as the ending goes tho, I like it like this. I felt the song is climactic and intense almost throughout the track, so the ending is more like a wind-down.

[MAI]

This is a catchy piece. The beat was especially creative and dynamic. I like the atmosphere with the chimes and vocal samples too. During the refrain (:44), the kick got a little lost in the mix. I would suggest some more compression and/or sidechaining. Nice job with the funky rhythms at 1:06. The instruments mesh well together, and I enjoyed when you offered some structural relief from all the energetic content at 1:50. Compositionally, this is a really solid piece. You also used reverb well here. Nice work!

Bobeo responds:

Thanks for the feedback man
Its funny because like immediately after I uploaded this and listened to it in it's entirety a couple of times I went back and changed a lot of the things you said to fix- before you even said them. Good ear. If you're genuinely interested in hearing the updated version i updated this uploaded and put it on my soundcloud.

[Rituals Of Sin]

I like the apprehensive mood at the beginning. The instruments mesh well together. It has a good sense of climax into :30. It’s a bit slow to develop after that, although I like the melodies with the piano, even if you could’ve used some more creative rhythms there. It has a sort of continuous flow to it, whereas I would’ve liked to see some dynamic contrast at some point, possibly in the form of a breakdown or bridge section. After the first minute or so, you offer very little new content in the piece. Therefore, it fails to keep my attention after a while and is in fact quite repetitive. It doesn’t really have any sort of meaningful conclusion either. Perhaps it would’ve served better as a loop anyway. With this little structural variety, though, it doesn’t really function as a complete piece IMO. You have the skeleton of a piece here, but it needs more variation. I wanted to see you develop those melodies more during the 2nd and 3rd times you repeated them. Otherwise, this song sounds like directionless background music. Giving your piece a structural ebb and flow will help bring out more emotion, drama, or whatever feeling you’re trying to convey. The mixing and mastering were solid, but compositionally this piece was flat, dry, and dull. Some of the percussion could’ve been compressed more to contribute more to the energy and drive of the piece as well. This has potential, but I’d like to see you build off of it a low more. Until then, keep at it, man! ;)

5.5/10

Zodiax responds:

Thanks for the constructive review! I really appreciate it.

[Suddenly a Sound Was Heard]

I like the atmospheric arpeggios. The wet synths and Lo-fi effects were cool too. It has little sense of development before :30, and then launches into this minimalistic, distorted drop that doesn’t really reflect the mood of the first 30 seconds very well. And then 1:04 sounds like a completely different piece. You took some big risks here with the composition and sound design. I personally think that the instrumentation-related risks paid off, but the compositional risks did not. This piece has a lot of jarringly disparate sub-themes and rough transitions (1:04, 1:23, etc.), and most of the time the harmonic depth is not sufficient to keep me engaged. The mixing and mastering quality is solid, and you used a lot of creative effects here. It’s an amusing experimental piece, but doesn’t really appeal to any emotions, drama, or sense of danceability I may have. I understand the theme of radio sounds and strings popping in periodically (as if you’re turning the dial on a radio), but instead of serving to offer pleasing contrast, it comes across as being a detriment to the sense of coherence of the track. So...creative, yet compositionally lacking. I could see you doing a lot with some of these themes in a more flowy, longer piece, though. Keep at it, man. ;)

6.25/10

Zanzlanz responds:

Dude, thanks so much! What a well thought-out, very professional review of the audio. I need friends with this much detail in their feedback.

But you're absolutely right - I should have submitted something way more structured to NGAUC, as a proof of ability, instead of something completely experimental. ;)

Take care with the rest of the event!

[guitar thing.mp3]

It’s a little hard to follow the rhythm at the beginning, although it helps when the bass comes in at :15. I also enjoyed the drums at around :30. It has a great sense of flow and additivity about it. The instruments mesh well, although I’m not hearing much melodic content until 1:33, and even then it’s way far back in the mix. If you used a bit more panning and filtering to really clarify all of the harmonies in there, this piece would be that much better. I liked the structural relief you offered at 1:48, although perhaps you could have used more dynamic contrast to heighten the sense of climax later. Unfortunately, during the second emotional height at 2:19, you don’t add a lot of meaningful content that wasn’t already in the first refrain. I like how exposed the melodies a bit more at 3:05, though. I appreciated the full texture this track had throughout. You have a good sense of harmony and tonality, and the mixing and mastering is generally good despite my minor clarity complaints.

8.25/10

Yoshiii343 responds:

Oh wow. I honestly don't know how to respond to this. Thank you so much for the review!

[Flying Free (2k16 Remake)]

I liked the atmospheric, climactic intro. The part at :17 felt powerful and full-textured. You had some melodies in there at :17, but they got really buried underneath the mix. The melodies at :56 are blissful and catchy, but I thought you could’ve used some more creative rhythms. Those same melodies also got a little lost when you added those additional harmonies at 1:18. There are also other instruments that sound indistinct at times, such as the crashes during the transition at 1:12. The emotional height early in this piece seems really drawn out, lasting essentially from :39 to 1:56, and even then the energy doesn’t stop. By 2:19, that structural relief is more than welcome, and even then it’s short-lived compared to the overall pacing of the piece. You also don’t really have another section with strong melodic content in this piece after the first half or so, which kind of limits the overarching sense of development this piece has. I also thought your transitions, some of your instruments, and chord progressions were pretty generic. You have a great sense of harmony, but unfortunately that harmony isn’t coming through as clearly as it could because of the mastering flaws. For example, I love that bell-like atmospheric synth at 1:57, but it’s hard to discern its melody. Perhaps some panning would’ve helped there. I suggest you explore more stereo widening effects in the future, and maybe also simply more careful filtering/equalizing. If you improve the production quality and flesh out the final climax more, this would be a very good piece. Until then, keep at it, man! ;)

7/10

viewtifulday responds:

Lol it's happy hardcore. Thanks for your feedback tho

[Magna Cannon]

I like the intensity at the beginning. It has a great, frantic energy to it. The drums are also really loud and prominent in the mix, which is a huge plus for channeling the energy. I enjoyed the panning at :44, but you don’t provide a lot of structural relief for an extended period of time here. You have a good sense of melody and harmony, but in order to create some structural contrast and maximize the drama of this piece, you needed to have a low-energy breakdown or bridge section at some point. The piece becomes pretty predictable and repetitive after a while, too, and I don’t think you vary the melodies enough later on. The mixing and mastering are strong here, but compositionally you could’ve done a lot more with this. You also do very little to vary the texture at all during the entire piece. You have the bass guitar, lead, and drums (and nothing else) for the entire track. Overall, there are several good ideas here, but you need to offer more structural variety, changing the intensity both within distinct sections and between sections. This piece is oozing with potential, though. Keep at it, man! ;)

7.25/10

TSRBand responds:

Thanks for the tips! Will be sure to keep them in mind for the future :)