The melody and beat were pretty good, but that melody instrument is really penetrating. I like the transition at :25, it loops really well, and the harmonies are good. That instrument is just really in-your-face, if you know what I mean. I don't think that's the mood you were going for, and I suggest you find an instrument that's a little more...cute-sounding. Sorry. Maybe that's just me being intolerant, but, anyway, keep up the good work. ;)