I like the intro and instruments. ^^ The beat got a little busy around :24 compared to the quiet intro, but I like the transition at :31 and the melody at :33. It's well-structured, catchy, and energetic, but maybe a little cliché at times, especially around :24 and with the repetitive bass line. My favorite part is at 1:37. It gets a little repetitive at times, and it definitely needs a less sudden ending. The harmonies are a little...strange, but maybe that's the mood you were going for. Overall, I like it, but I agree that it needs some work. I would recommend trying to go a different direction with it in which you vary things a lot more, and see where it takes you. I'm looking forward to hearing the final product! ;)