I liked the ominous and strangely relaxed beginning, as well as the bass and the distorted effects later on. I wish it progressed a little faster, though, and I don't really think it loops that well. It definitely has potential, though. This is a solid intro to a piece. It just needs to be more energetic, more melodic, more engaging. You have the rhythm section down, and it's pretty catchy, too, but there isn't enough substance for my tastes. Keep working on it. It'll be worth your while. ;)