I like the bass-y groove at the beginning. The percussion is really nice, but it could also come through sharper in the mix with a bit more compression. The organ riff at :14 is really catchy, but the mix sounds a bit muddy there. I suspect some of the lower-end frequencies in the organ, synths, and other harmonies are interfering with those of the bass and drums. You can fix that by adding an equalizer to each instrument besides the bass and kick in the mixer, and then removing the frequencies below 200 Hz or so.
Otherwise, I really like the sound design and melodies here. You clearly have a great sense of harmony, rhythm, and progression. That said, the piece could use a bit more variety in terms of the energy level and dynamics. Right now, the beat and bass line are playing for almost the whole piece, which makes the piece sound more like a demo track instead of a compelling narrative. That said, I liked how you stripped away most of the harmonies at 2:02 and then “reset” the piece with the mellow melody at 2:31. By 3:25, the rhythmic syncopations and atmosphere are really coming together again, but the mix also sounds really strained. I’ll also say that this piece could use some more memorable melodies that make themselves more distinct from the rest of the atmospheric harmonies.
Overall, the instrumentation, mood, danceability, and flow of this piece are all highlights, but aspects of the composition could’ve been a lot bolder and, perhaps more importantly, the mixing could use some cleaning up throughout. Keep at it, X2scepten! ^_^
Mixing, mastering, and balance
.75/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
1/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.5/2
Instrumentation and sound design
1/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1.25/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
1/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.25/1
Composite score
7.75/10