I like the dreamy mood at the beginning, but I don't like that aggressive-sounding instrument that starts around :30. It doesn't really fit with the otherwise blissful mood, so it sounds a little out-of-place to me. Some of your transitions felt a little too busy and angry, like around 1:30. It got better after 2:00, and I like the part at 2:45 a lot, as well as the melody at 5:12. I like the ending too. However, I must be honest in saying that I like your original work better. I'm looking forward to your collab, and also to August 25th. ;D