I like the bell-like synth at the beginning. Some of the harmonies sound a bit dissonant, notably at :06, and a lot of the instruments are pretty cheesy and unpolished. Sometimes it’s good to modify presets to fit the piece you’re making better. Also, I find it a bit jarring how quickly you switch out different instruments, which in turn only stick around for 10-15 seconds or so. I’d suggest consolidating some of your instrumental choices, and also maybe using some more prominent drums or something to smooth over the transitions between different sections of the piece. Seriously, sweeps and crashes can go a long way towards making abrupt transitions seem less abrupt. In general, the drums should probably be louder anyway - it’s hard to hear them for most of the piece.
Still, I like a lot of the individual riffs and ideas here. The soaring arpeggio at 1:04 is probably my favorite. You clearly have a good sense of rhythm and harmony, but the corny sound design and disjointed arrangement of the piece don’t do you any favors here. It might help to slow the pacing down a bit - this piece is pretty short right now, after all - and focus on crafting gradual transitions and giving your instruments some more flavor and depth. A little reverb might help towards that latter goal, but you may also need some different samples that are less cliche. I’d suggest PM’ing @LD-W and joining the NG Audio Pub on Discord. The Resources tab there is full of great sample libraries and tips on where to find more.
Anyway, hope you found this review helpful. I’d encourage you to keep working on this piece, too - it’s catchy and has a lot of whimsy about it. Keep at it, deepfriedfiend! ^_^
Mixing, mastering, and balance
1/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
.75/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.5/2
Instrumentation and sound design
.25/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.5/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.5/1
Composite score
5.5/10